Chore-Less Writing

By Jonathan Lallement on November 29, 2020

Chore-less Writing hear they have a paper to do? Why is it that a hobby can be hated so universally inside of a school? Easy answer is that schools kill fun but to be more precise, the education system creates a hatred of writing by adding tedious and pointless papers. I am sorry to every school system but I have never and will never get into the argument as of why pens are better than pencils. 

Why do schools do this? I assume to make it difficult and so we push ourselves while also to beat fair. I mean not everyone will have fun so why not make sure no one can have fun! 

So how do you have fun while writing? You can start by writing for any reason besides “I have to”. Writing because you want to just like anything else will make you better when you have to. Same goes for sports. The people who love to practice are often the best players on the field or court. That does not change when it is a more artistic hobby or profession. Once you are past the mental block of writing, words can pour in and to add to your arsenal you should start using rules that school teaches you to your essay. I ignored those to help further my point,but add transitions they are your friend as long as you keep a flow in the essay. Another thing to avoid that I have certainly embraced is to avoid terms like you or I which while they help solidify great points in a topic like mine, most writing will be persuasive, which those words may show bias, or informative where people should be focusing on your data not your opinion.

 Writing is a tool that can be sharpened but do not let it become a chore! If you do not have a class that will let you have fun and learn with a skill like writing then do it on your own because writing helps you understand so much of life and your own emotions. 

Having the Last Word

by: Devon Geary

One of the most important parts of a passage is the conclusion. Conclusions can give the reader a chance to make sure they understood the passage, as the author restates how they connect to the thesis. There are several ways the author can invoke a response from the reader using the conclusion, including using emotion, teaching a lesson, and/or calling the reader to action.

Call the Reader to Action

The author could take the opportunity at the end to ask people to share the post with other people, or they could ask the reader to think about the lesson that was being taught in the post. The author could also encourage an action that helps others. Maybe the post is about the environment, so the author could ask the reader to share the information and commit to recycling and doing things that would help keep the environment safe. They could also ask for comments at the end of the post, to keep in touch with what their readers are interested in.

To Invoke Emotions

The author can use rhetoric to do so. Lessons also apply here because the type of lesson can influence the reader’s emotions. Maybe it’s about how people can get through a rough patch in their life. That can remind readers of something they went through or are currently going through. Key words to use for this include: Joy, fear, anger, ruin, and senseless. Say the passage is about environmentalism again, if the conclusion has the words ruin and senseless in it to describe the damage to the planet, the reader is likely to feel anger or sadness about what’s happening.  

Length of the Passage/Genre

It is recommended that the conclusion be about 10% of the overall word count. For an essay, the conclusion may range between a paragraph and even multiple pages, depending upon how much is needed to reach the goal. For an essay conclusion, there could be quotes, questions, implications of studies, and be parallel to the introduction. Remember, do not add a brand-new point into the conclusion. For stories, make sure to wrap up the story in the conclusion. A cliffhanger is fine, but make sure not too much of the plot is left unfinished. The readers need to feel satisfied after reading it. For example, if the characters are solving a mystery throughout the book, then the main mystery should be solved in the conclusion, do not leave that as a cliffhanger. If one wants to leave them with curiosity about the next story, have the villain run away or give hints that there’s another mystery to be solved next time.

Conclusions are a necessary for all types of work, as they summarize the passage, and there are several optional goals, such as invoking emotion, teaching a lesson, and calling for action. A powerful ending can be influential. The last words the author writes to the reader stay with them, its important to get that right.

Overusing adjectives in Your Writing

By: Cheyenne Colt

When you are writing, you may sometimes experience writer’s block or simply run out of the words to say, while still having a minimum word count you need to reach. One way in which people handle this issue is by adding in filler words. Overusing filler words takes away from a writer’s piece, though. While it is adding to your word count, it somehow makes your writing less effective when your wording is repetitive. It can also bore the reader. The word “very” is perhaps one of the most overused words in writing, whether that be in the message you would like to convey, or the vocabulary being used. There are two instances in which these mistakes are made and can be corrected. The first is using the word “very” instead of other adjectives with the same meaning such as “remarkably” or “exceedingly” or “profoundly.”

Read the following sentences and take note of the difference between the two:

  1. It is very important to wear your mask in public.
  2. It is incredibly important to wear your mask in public.

While the two sentences essentially hold the same message, the second one sounds more serious and professional. Changing up wording also keeps readers interested.

Not only does the word “very” sometimes not hold the urgency you need, but it also just becomes repetitive to continually read/hear. Take, for example, the following two sentences:

  1. She ran very quickly to see her friend because she was very excited. They had not seen each other for a very long time.
  2. She sprinted to see her friend because she was ecstatic. They had not seen each other for an awfully long while.

By using the word “sprinted,” I avoided using a filler word, while also creating a stronger sense of urgency. Another example would be saying the word “joyous” instead of “very happy.” Using the word “ecstatic” instead of “very happy” creates an entirely different feel but still expresses the message you are trying to convey. The changes made in the last sentence make the writing sound more professional and interesting. It can be different to avoid overusing the word “very,” especially when you are trying to express urgency; however, there are ways around it. When I proofread my writing and I see that I used the word very, I will either think of a replacement word or look up a word on thesaurus that fits the sentence. I am not saying you can never use the word “very” in your writing. It is a simple, yet effective word. If you are critiquing someone’s work, there is not much of a need to use larger words. Saying “very good job” conveys the message just fine. It is always a good idea to check your writing to make sure you have not overused any words, though. While this is a simple fix, it can make a huge difference in your writing. 

Cutting the Fat from Your Writing

By: Jerod Buchler

                Yes, it is very important to meet a word count to get a work accepted, but once you meet that word count then you must be concise enough to not bore the reader. To such a point where the editor will not even finish reading it. When writing for school we are taught to do everything in our power to meet that word count even if that means sacrificing the quality of that work. That is a stigma that we need to cut through because as someone who will possibly need to read through these works if I end up getting lost in all of the useless words, I will give up on it and dismiss it entirely. When I give up on it entirely, then I will vote it out of the magazine.

So when I tell you that I don’t want to see phrases in your writing like, “as follows,” or even things like, “what I was saying earlier,” I mean it, because that is the stuff that takes away from good writing and makes it bad. Those are the phrases that make the whole piece tears apart at the seams. When these writings are too lengthy, they get boring, then whatever you had to say just gets thrown out the window, because no one can get through it. I would say that the crucial thing to remember about writing with  a word count is to not add things just for that word count add things that mean something for the writing even if that takes you longer to think about and come up with. So instead of writing something and focusing on the word count of it write something that you care about and the word count will follow, and you won’t have to worry about it. The biggest example that I can give about writing about something that you care about is take something that comes from the heart and write about that and there will never be a shortage of words needed to fill up that count. If you write something just to get some sort of response from people than there is a good chance that you will just wrack your brain trying to squeeze out enough words to make a word count.

Want to become a better writer? Cry…or laugh

By: Sherly Bonilla

Often times, we hear and read about the importance of having good structure in writing, or to be objective, or to have good grammar. While it is true that all these aspects are fundamentally important, another important aspect of writing can often times be overlook: vulnerability. A word that often times is deemed as intimidating, vulnerability does not and should not entirely be construed negatively or associated with sadness, or helplessness, etc. In fact, this aspect of writing is so important that it will become one the most powerful tools to ensure that you write your best work. Read below and find out why is it so important to be vulnerable in order to improve your writing. As well as how to be vulnerable without feeling unsafe or exposed!


The importance of vulnerability:
• Ability to convey emotions: your work will be better appreciated when the readers are left feeling happy, sad, or angry or whatever emotion you intended to create through your writing.
• Honesty is a virtue: and that is what being vulnerable in your writing essentially means, to be honest with your intent, emotions, and purpose of your writing, whatever those may be.
• Relatable: being honest in your writing means that your readers will be capable of not only understanding your purpose, but also will be able to relate to your work.
• Connection: when your readers can relate to what they are reading, a connection between the readers and author is being made, and a good writer is able to connect with the readers.

How to write with vulnerability:
• Let experiences inspire your writing: the best way to create imagery and convey emotion in the readers mind is to relate a vivid memory that could happen to anyone.
• Be honest with yourself: if you have certain emotions that are inspiring you to write, allow them to, whether it is feeling nostalgic or proud, do not try to hide or mask them in your writing for the fear of being too attached.
• Be mindful: there will be certain things you will not feel comfortable writing about, and that is completely fine, you can still be vulnerable without having to completely share everything. Creating similar stories or scenarios that will still deliver the same purpose can work just as well. In the end, there is no right or wrong answer in terms of writing, and no one is perfect, so becoming a better writer is a matter of constantly finding new ways to improve.

Your Lifesaver, the Proofreader

by: Brianna Barron-Moreno

Proofreading is the uttermost important technique in order to produce great writing, this is the final step that a writer should always check through in order to make sure that their final piece doesn’t have any errors or mistakes; such as having spelling errors, poor paragraphs and sentence structure, and bad grammar. Rephrasing sentences that don’t flow in with one another, adding details, removing unnecessary information, adding commas, and correcting the tense are a few things that I’ll be explaining throughout my given examples and reasonings.

When going back to look at your final product keep in mind to always read your work double in order to find those small spelling errors or bad grammar that you might’ve missed the first time reading it. Here’s an example that shows some errors that people might’ve missed at first and went back to proofread:

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As you can tell, in red, they took out some words that sounded repetitive or didn’t sound right while reading. This can be seen in the sentence “to which economics can be applied and be used to understand” instead of having “be applied and be used” just take out the unnecessary words and focus on the conjunction “and” instead. With that, you don’t need the extra “be”. The sentence would sound smoother as “be applied and used…”

Then, they would fix their bad grammar by inserting commas into some sentences to separate a series of words and avoid confusion. This can be seen in the sentence “to my surprise the daily news which I used to watch was now not just a means of watching new people debate but also a learning experience, I was able to…” At first this sentence sounds too long and just seems like it’s a run off sentence, not having any pauses, which could confuse the reader. Instead, adding commas in the appropriate areas can create a smoother and more direct sentence.

After you’ve made sure to look and fix your small errors, start to look at the bigger picture which sentences need arrangement, removement, and added details.  

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Take the same paragraph, but this time look at the red words, observe how many of these sentences and words have been corrected, removed, or even rearranged in order to make the sentence structure sound smoothly while reading. Take the sentence “in 11th standard I along with some of my friends and my economics teacher, created a WPI index, by taking average prices of a basket of commodities from different wholesale markets to measure inflation.” Here they’ve corrected the tense, added details, rearranged the sentence, and replaced a word with a more relevant one, building the paragraph’s structure into a smoother, nicer flow.

In conclusion, proofreading is a technique that produces great writing, it helps improve your final product by giving it a nice written content flow that helps address the correct message towards your audience. When you’re done with your writing make sure to always read your work double this can help you pin point some spelling errors, bad grammar, words that don’t sound good or are repetitive, and even sentences that don’t flow in with one another and may need to be rephrased.

5 Tips for Filling a Blank Page

By Cassandra Carmichael

Blank pages can be scary. Sometimes it’s hard to pull an idea out of nowhere. We all need a little inspiration to get the gears moving. Try out these 5 tips for filling a blank page! If you like these tips or want to learn more on how to expand your writing techniques, consider taking Dr. Ford’s Creative Writing course here at our campus. You’ll learn more techniques like these and so much more!

1. Start with a name

Names have a lot of power. The meanings of a name or even the sound can start a whole train of thought. Starting with a name can help you build a character and a story around this name. Picking a name from a baby book or generator can spark some ideas. Say you randomly pick the name Dahlia. Maybe Dahlia is a small ginger girl with bright blue eyes. Maybe Dahlia is a very innocent and kind girl but lives in a big, dirty city with many mean and two-faced people. A flower in a field of weeds. Have fun with the meaning of your name and twist that story around it. Maybe your character has a pet dog they rely on for comfort and safety. This dog could be named Apollo, referring to the god of healing. Names can be a good start to a short story. 

2. A Memory 

Every story has a little bit of truth and a little bit of a lie. Try starting out with the truth. Think of a memory that either happened to you or someone you know or even on the news. Once you have that memory find the part you can exaggerate or change into something completely different to take the story on a different path. Change names or settings or dialogue and see where this new memory will take you. Say you had a memory about going on a boat trip with your dad. Nothing that exciting happened, but you can make it exciting. In the middle of the night, while the boat rocked under the moonlight, a mermaid came up to the side of the boat. You talked to the mermaid and decided to trade places for the night. With her magic, you become a mermaid and she becomes human. It didn’t really happen, but it started with the memory of your boat trip with dad.  

3. Your Dreams 

As college students, sleep isn’t that high on our things-to-do list, but everyone dreams sometimes. Dreams can be the perfect starter to a story. They can be completely wacky or tell us a lot about our inner selves. Maybe you had a dream about a gorilla sitting on your living room couch. You could write about how earlier, you had visited the zoo and secretly fed the gorilla your mom’s gross tuna sandwich. The gorilla loved it so much that he snuck into the back of your dad’s van and came home with you. The weirder the dream, the better the story.

4. A Picture

Any kind of visual can help you stir up a story whether it’s a painting, photograph, sculpture, or any form of art. Maybe a scenery or unique architecture can tickle an idea. Let’s say you see a picture of a cemetery flooded by water from some sort of storm. The coffins are pulled up from the ground and floating all around the field bumping into each other. From this visual build a story around it. Write about how everyone in Heaven was freaking out because their clothes are all wet and they don’t know why. Maybe a spirit from Heaven volunteers to investigate and travels down to Earth. After discovering what had happened to their poor graveyard, this spirit must find someone to restore the cemetery! But who will listen to a ghost? Anything that catches your eye is a great prompt starter. 

5. Trade Shoes 

If you’re an adult male and always write from the point of view of an adult male you are limiting your creativity. This might sound odd but think about your own writing and what you tend to lean towards. Most likely your own gender and age because that’s what you know the best. You know what a person your age does and doesn’t do. You know the advantages and disadvantages of your gender. But try trading shoes with someone else and see what new pathways you can take. This also leads you to research and exploring new ideas. Try branching out into new viewpoints to see what possibilities you can take. 

To Express with Purpose

By Kassidy Boles

Writing poetry doesn’t have to be hard… but it is, isn’t it? The words don’t always flow, and we find ourselves unable to convey the emotion that poetry should so powerfully emphasis. What poetry comes down to is its structure, use of language, and whether or not to rhyme. To write from the heart can get lost in translation and my goal here is to help you, dear reader and perspective writer, understand why your poetry might be feeling a little… flat.

So, you’ve got your poem written out, but is it conveying what you want it to? Well, take a look at the poem’s structure. Is it consistent? This is important as a poem that is all over the place can lose a reader quickly and a poem without structure is just a blurb on the page. If you are writing poetry about a happy topic, long drawn out, deep lines will cut the reader to the core instead of uplifting them. It’s important to play around with your poem after you’ve gotten ink on the page so to speak. Here is where you as the author can experiment on your creation such as a mad scientist, crazed and needing that creative fix only you can create. You have the time now to play with your pace and diction, what concept you wish to emphasize.

But what is the language like in your poem? Are you using flowery words and telling someone how they should feel, or are you creating an image within the mind’s eye? Concrete language can make or break a poem. Avoiding abstract words and conveying meaning using literal terms will emphasize your poem in every way you want it to. Instead of saying, “She was happy,” try, “She shone from ear to ear brighter than the sun.” Words that are literal are vivid as they can be seen, felt, touched, or heard. You can use literal terms such as night, weeping, frigid, to convey mystery and unease while words like, cinnamon, violet, coffee, or tea could be worked together to talk about someone special. Even sensations can be produced through your poetry such as “hot like a summer day, the cacophonous roar of a hurricane, the smell of fresh baked apple pie,” are all examples of things someone can sense in a veritable way. Though poetry is to be interpreted by the reader, you don’t want your reader to get lost in those interpretations. The last thing you want is for the poem to be too vague. Specific details paint a picture and that’s what makes poetry so desirable. Comparisons will be your friend, events are relatable, objects are tangible. Never tell the reader how to feel, instead show them what it means to feel.

But what about rhyming? It’s easy to feel like a poem should rhyme as we are hit with it all the time in the media. We’ve all heard nursery rhymes and the whimsical tone they have. But poetry is not limited to such things and really, rhyming your poem can distract your reader from the poem itself. Make no mistake, to have a rhythm in your poetry and to rhyme are very different things. Take great caution as rhyming tends to feel forced if not used properly and the poem itself loses the momentum as you spend your time searching for the word that fits, instead of the right word. Instead of forcing your poem to rhyme, focus instead on how you want it to sound when spoken aloud. Practicing around friends and family will help with perfecting the sound of your poem. Focus on your syllables and which words will be stressed. Action words like nouns and verbs will have the stressed sound you’ll be looking for, while shorter words such as “a, I, the” will flow in between. Meter is used to refer to the sound pattern of a poem, it’s stressed and unstressed beat, and will give your poem the rhythm without the rhyme.

Five Reasons to Submit your Work!

By: Katlyn Kaminskie

In this post I will talk about a few reasons why submitting your work to a magazine or just in general submitting your work is a really good idea for any aspiring artist.

  1. Submitting your work to a literary magazine or submitting your work anywhere for that matter is good exposure for an aspiring artist or writer. Even if its just a small magazine, your work will still be out there in the public eye and you never know who will see it.
  2. Submitting your work to possibly get published will most definitely improve your work. Whether the piece is accepted to the be published or not it will make you look at what you are creating differently, once it is published with your name attached people will begin to associate you with what you created. Sometimes when you submit your work places you will also receive feedback on what to improve which greatly helps you as well. A good example of this is when you write an article for a website, once you submit it you receive feedback on whether or not the topic is appropriate and how you can make the article better but if it never was submitted your ideas would never be shared and you would not how to convey them in a better way.
  3. Whether what you have created is published in a magazine or not it is good experience for you the creator. How is your work not being published good experience you may wonder, well like I said before it helps you improve your work in a multitude of ways. Also, I personally feel that submitting your work helps improve your confidence which is key in any situation, and submitting your work means you were confident enough to let a stranger read it which is very important in this type of field, which leads me to my next reason.
  4. Be proud of the work you create! It is something you thought of on your own and took the time to create, no matter what anyone says you put time and effort into the piece, and you should most definitely be proud of it. If you are proud of it then there is no harm in others reading or looking at it. You love and are most likely very passionate about this skill you have so own it!
  5. We want to see, read, or listen to what you have created! Like I said before be proud of what you have made, while it may not always feel like it others do enjoy what you have created especially a literary and arts magazine like Elektraphrog! The more submissions we receive the better and we would love to help you!

10 Tips to Performance Poetry

First off, let’s note that performing poetry is not for everyone. Sometimes a poet’s heart is simply in the written work, or the idea of the stage is too daunting to attempt. Other times a poet desires to incorporate another facet of poetry into their work such as performing it.

When it comes to reading poetry in front of an audience it is very different than other types of public speaking or theater. It can be a truly rewarding experience to share your thoughts and emotions with an audience.

So let’s talk about 10 helpful tips to performance poetry and how to better enrich your experience as a performance poet.

These tips can provide you with a framework to spoken word poetry as well as encouragement to be creative!

Every writer has a voice and spoken word poetry is another way to use yours. Let’s get started!

1. Speak up! It’s important to note that any piece you read in front of an audience you have selected for people to hear…so make sure they hear it!

2. Don’t hide behind your paper or microphone. At most places where you will be performing your work, there is a microphone. Try not to hide behind it or behind your paper. It is okay to walk around the area with the microphone in one hand or lean away from the microphone to emphasize a word. Don’t think you are confined to the small square right behind the microphone.

3. Find a friendly face. Nerves are inevitable but one thing that can alleviate some of the nervous feeling is finding a friendly face in the audience. A friend, a family member, or even a teacher could be a perfect face to look to during the beginning of your poem to make you comfortable.

4. Don’t oversell it. Try to avoid being extravagantly animated or over the top in your performance. Don’t try to force the audience to be entertained. Try to keep it natural and comfortable for both you and the audience.

5. Use a piece you like. When deciding on what to perform, pick a piece you enjoy reading. Pick a piece you are familiar with and have completed. Pick a piece you are confident in and proud to share.

6. Don’t think of it as a formal speech. You don’t have to treat it as a formal speech. You can dress casually and treat it more like a party with friends. Think of it as a comfortable atmosphere.

7. Know your audience. If you are in a pub with fellow adults your age, you might read a poem about your last heartbreak and use some unapologetic words to describe that partner, but, if you are in a coffee shop that may have children around, it’s probably best to avoid such things as profanity. This is when it’s important to know your audience. Be respectful to who may be listening to your poem and make sure that your topic fits the event.

8. Don’t edit as you perform. It is not required to have your poem memorized to perform it; it is actually more likely that you will have it printed out on paper. If so, try to refrain from editing your work as you read it. If there is a word misspelled try not to tell the audience there’s a typo. If you don’t like a line as you are reading it, don’t stop in the middle to correct yourself. Make sure your work is as completed as possible before you perform it so you won’t be tempted to edit it.

9. Focus on delivery; make the audience see the words. Since performance poetry is something that the audience listens to instead of reads, make sure the audience can experience what you’re saying. You’re telling them the story behind your poetry. Use different and interesting speaking tactics to make it entertaining and keep their attention. For example use articulation, inflections, tone, facial expressions, and hand motions.

10. Don’t forget to practice. Practice helps you to know what you are saying so that you don’t trip over your words. Practice helps you to feel confident in your work and to own it. Practice makes perfect!

Best wishes,

Amanda Finsel